Comments:
John Hamiltion:
You should begin the essay with a hook. Rather than saying, "The title of my book is 'The Last Mission' and the author name is Harry Mazer.
Also, i do not fully understand what you are saying. There are many grammatical errors that you need to fix.
You did not answer the questions clearly which veers your essay to a whole 'nother idea- this makes it confusing and less on the point.
Conclusion paragraph is needed!!!
Cindy Tadeo:
Include question before you begin the essay!
Your analysis is great, but i was confused at a few spots. Also, you should describe the characters more clearly. I like how you know their is an audience, and so I can understand. I actually really like this book, and i would like to read it someday.
I was confused a little when you were describing the setting.
You are almost at the 1,000 mark- you can do it!
Conclusion does not sound finished!
Andy Lau:
In the beginning, you did not actually discuss the "authors style of writing", and if you did, it was not clearly stated. Additionally, it seems like you are summarizing the story, and at the end, you provide a brief analysis.
Be more specific! Because when you state "The style of this book is unique," How unique? Describe, explicitly, what you mean.
It also seems really confusing- which distracted me from the actual content.
Conclusion is needed to summarize points!
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